at manukau

WALT recount a personal experience

Planning my recount

Title:manukau

Orientation (Introduction)	Who?	Sister nieces
	What?	To have breakfast
	When?	Friday
	Where?	Westfield
What happened? Tell it in the order it happened. the car and went home with my sister.	First of all When we got into  Manukau we  brought a drink  .
	Next We went in to Farmers   then we  in to westfield .
	After that When i was going to get Something to eat  then .
	Later i saw  whaea heather and  jassandra at  westfield.
	In the end After went outside  i felt happy  because me and my sister went out Together  and we into the  car went home with my sister.
Reorientation (Summary)

Now that you have made a plan, it is time to write your recount in full sentences:

On Friday my sister, my neices and I went to have some lunch    Whipped  cream and  Chocolate Sundae. My sister had for break .                                                    MCDonald's nieces had  Burger King . its was yummm and my sister love  it.  We then went shopping.

First of all we got to Manukau and bought a drink  it  was  smoothie it Tastes like Strawberry  whipped cream.  my sister had  a smoothie is well  chocolate   it was  YUMMY . MY sister brought  the drinks for us My sister bought them from Subway it Cost $400 for Mine and my nieces and me we do don't have to wait long in  line  Around  we walked a.

Next we went into Farmer's me and my sister got some Clothes for me then we and we got a lol doll for me and my nieces i sister bought for it cost 17 for one me .went into Westfield. I saw  whaea heather and jessandra i said hi to  how are you and she said good Thanks.the we looked around  what we going to eat then my sister said i'm getting Burger King   i said can i get pancakes  she said yes to me.

After that I was going to get something to eat had pancakes with  whipped cream hmm it was  yummy  my sister had Burger King My nieces had McDonald's when we had lunch her friend came to have lunch  with us she had Texas chicken roll it cost $500.the her aunt  come  lunch with us my sister gave her a hug then she sit down .

In the end we went to the car and went home with my sister and  nieces i   felt happy that  went out with my sister because  my sister doesn't really take me out with her then she said let  go to rainbows ends at night rids then we get pocon she said and she said let  get in our  Pyjamas then we go to  rainbow ends.

I know I have been successful writing because my recount:
1	Has an orientation to tell who, what, when, where.
2	Recounts the experience in the order the events happened.
3	Shares my feelings about the experience at the end.
4	Is written using verbs in the past tense (I saw, I walked, I felt).
5	Has sentences with capital letters and full stops.